This is such an amazing story so far! It brings a new scope on what Claires and Serahs life could have been like. You write just enough so it doesn't seem like the chapter is short but it still keeps the reader guessing.
I haven't found a story quite like this one and I love it! It is completely original and all your own and it just has this... spark? It makes you feel like you just want to keep reading. Much like your other story Yogurt.
I love how you still kept some of Lightnings anger and how she thinks with her fists rather than her head.
Serah is also still the one that reminds Claire on what is right and wrong but still manages to be the fun sister she is.
All in all this is such a wonderful story and I hope you choose to complete it!